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i saw this had no critiques so i decided to come to the rescue. Then i realised why. as was once advised to me " long paragraph eek syndrome" only ...

i dont know if im quite like everyone else, but i find things like this hard to read... you have a lot of paragraphs, but most are there for easy ...

ok... try to be severe here lucy.... for a start... whats the plot exactly? is it just some short piece you felt like writing to get the fact across that ...

this was really short, so i couldnt pick much wrong things with it... EXCEPT!! you wrote like this: i have a cat.his... no spaces after the full stop. it makes ...

Writers block is frustrating. Its beyond frustrating, it’s more like self inflicted internal torture. I know what writers block is like, i dont need to read about it. This piece ...

lol incan, i love that... If you indended for this work to confuse and ultimately bore the reader, you succeeded. If your intentions were other than that, you failed. Best, ...

i have to agree with incan. As nicely as possible... this was definately NOT the best poem here. Sorry. But I was reading it and i rolled my eyes. I ...

hehehehe Cedric Quilfeather. Where have I heard that one before?? I liked the first part of the story, the part I read. I thought for my own benefit a bit ...

I never thought I'd say this (me being nice and loving) that I agree with Incan. HOW DID THAT HAPPEN :shock: ??? Anyway, this sort of poem is the things ...

yay! more! i love them!! you are so good at these poems! i espescially love the one about the shirt because the other day my brother walked into my room ...

haha. i like it but its too short. WRITE MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! oh and piepieman (lol, love the name) lighten up a little. god! poetry can actually be fun. its not all ...

wow snoink, thats the shortest critique ive ever read from you. i like the poem, its very... interesting i guess. but the no body knows who i am bit, well ...

lego!! wooh i love lego!! but why were you shooting them? never shoot lego! never never never, or i shoot you! mwahaha. as for the poem, it lacks interest. Im ...

oooo, impressive. never wouldve thought of any of that. but isnt the Ravenclaw symbol a raven? and also, just near the end it says before when it should say be ...

awww that is soo sad :( but well written. when I read it, it reminded me of The Pact, which I think is the only book to make me cry. ...