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  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: My Brother Has A Gun

    Well, I think Incandescence was a little harsh, but he's half right. I'm no expert at poetry, but I will do my best: Firstly, ask yourself what it is about ...

    Jun 12, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Machinations #1 (part 2)

    Hi Kylan! Beside him, the older couple were talking softly between themselves, I find this a little tame—I struggle with the passive voice that seems to slow down the pace, ...

    Jun 12, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: A Feeble Attempt

    Hey HC! That was a nice little poem. Firstly, let me just point out that you don't need to have a capital letter at the start of each line, just ...

    Jun 12, 2008
  • Article / Essay » Review, General Re: Brisingr (Eragon 3) Spoiler

    Bluntly? I hate Paolini. Wouldn't it be funny? We all make fake fanmail, e.g.: Dear Mr Paolini, I just finished reading "Eragon" I must say I am very impressed. I ...

    Jun 12, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Milboukia *Part I* (Rewrite)

    Hi Dustfinger! "Malountic Teelious Panactos!" Hmm, I don't know about this for an opening. It is very forced on the reader, and it makes them struggle. It turns away a ...

    Jun 11, 2008


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