LoganSparks

I understand that this isn't supposed to be a full-length story so I'll keep that in mind for my feedback. The intro is pretty interesting, you don't usually see humans ...

This is a nice little short. The tone is heavy and monotonous which is enhanced by the repetition in your prose like when the narrator repeats their schedule to themself. ...

I'm not too familiar with poetry but this is certainly interesting. The topic is well implied without being too on the nose. The ending particularly the line "I am aware ...

This is quite a good short story. The atmosphere is heavy and consistent, and it fits well with the world building you've done. I also really enjoyed the descriptive prose, ...