LoganH

I liked how you put in a lot of historical details. I wonder if you could have gave more sensory details. Also I wonder if you could have had more ...

There are several grammar and spelling mistakes in this story. The characters are all comprised of flat character, which needs to be fixed. Also needs more sensory details.

Good story about ancient China! It is kind of a downer ending, as well as it doesn't give any context for who or what the characters are.

Put more detail about the lesson from the taoists, other wise good book!