Livinginfantasy

Alrighty, so I decided I should save this poem, and here's the result: I'm not afraid of death, And I'm not afraid to live Like tomorrow's never coming. And I ...

INTRO Well... It wouldn't hurt to ask! I assumed that since you kept posting chapters without saying "give me a review for God's sake!", that you didn't really want reviews. ...

[rambling]I must agree, this was very well written. I liked it so much, my friend. Good word choice. And, I also have to second the last stanza being superb! Beautiful, ...

So you couldn't get enough of me, huh? :wink: I'd be glad to review again for you, but you didn't give much to work with this time, apart from what ...

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O M G ! I love this! The emotion is just drips from this. Ahhh... gorgeous! You should try making this into a poem format. It seems more poetic.

Alright, I've edited again. Anyone else got something to say?

It really is a lot better. I love how you take criticism. I still think the last line should be removed though... it isn't a strong ending in my opinion.

Thanks kris. I've edited! I hope it reads a little better.

Love the title! Okay, this is not sucky! Oh yeah, like everyone said, it could use some work, but it's a diamond in the rough. I suggest adding some length ...

Thanks! I'll fix it up later

Woah! Deep. Very deep. Very intense. The ending was wonderful and powerful. Although I don't like the repeating phrase "When I look upon your face...". But that's just me. Bravo! ...

Really cute. It has a lot of voice and I like the structure! Sorry that wasn't very constructive! :D Keep writing, and keep up the curlyqpride!

Thank you! I edited this story following what Sapphire and clograbby told me. I'm entering my first contest and this is the piece (thanks XxxDo!). P.S I've decided to write ...

Thanks everyone. I edited some of the weird wording out. This was a spur-of-the-moment thing, and I just wanted to see how it played out. Thanks for reviewing! :D