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I liked it. You took the words out of my head, because I have been thinking about forbidden love for a while. It was pretty. Sunsets on the shining water ...

Hiya! This is a good job, Reuben. The only things I caught were some dialouge problems and capitalization. Here we go: "Stop. Follow me." [b]Comma not a period. Then the ...

YES!! *punches her fist in the air* Yes, yes, YES!! :D :D :D Here are the good things. I saw no errors. I told you that you wouldn't disappoint me. ...

I, like, know no one besides few on here. So, after reading this, I got a bit more confused. Pretty much, I was saying, "WHAT?" But still, it was hilariously ...

I'm back! :D Now lets get started! "What?" Elvy asked. "You can't know that....how could you know?" You can change the period after asked to a comma, then move this ...

Ooooh. Creepy! *shudders* I have to say that so far, this is your best post. There were few mistakes, and it made sense! "I think only Dran knows now," Period ...

Hiya again! I am not going to go into as much detail as I did the other posts. You didn't capitalized some beginnings of some sentences. Then, you capitalized some ...

I bet you love seeing me now! :D Barr began. "We have with no doubt postponed this for far to long. We ride out today," At the end there, replace ...

Hiya! I am back! :D First off, good again! You are developing this very nicely. :D Now on to the crits! Elvy dreamed to learn to ride a horse, but ...

Gosh, I hate to crit this after you have edited this about a million times. :? But I only found one thing!! :D "So...what you suggest is to venture deep ...

I liked this. It was pretty, and I can relate to it. :D It would be nice if it was a song too. For the poem part though, a little ...

Hiya! I liked this! THis is going to be good! :D Sometimes I get pissed off enough to procure some kind of revenge. But usually I just spit into the ...

I liked this! *claps eagerly like a little girl* Pretty, pretty!! Now, I looked at the title and at the poem and think, "But they don't go together?" It might ...

I liked this too! Despite the 2:1 thing, this was good!! It was strong and powerful. This is one thing though that confused me a bit: Her eyes were clouded ...

Ooooh. I like this! It was a bit gross, and I agree with BBB (man, I still want to say Jared). That line was a little bit tricky to understand. ...