Lindsaroo

Oh My Gosh...Dude, you have to write more! Like, this is a good start to introduce stuff, like Snoink said, but now you've got me wanting to know about the ...

Hey there. Let me just say I think you've got a nice little story going on here. I really think with a bit of work it could be really good. ...

This sounds pretty good. I see it's kinda like Timmy's story...shoot I still need to finish reading Ch.2. Ugh. But yeah, It seems like a good read. True the age ...

Woah...long...but pretty good for your first try. I liked the plot to this thought. Very good and sad :( Awwww! lol It was pretty good though. It is though, probably, ...

Awwwww! I'm so happy for them...but wtf? Why are they all like "Very well Master Lyons"? That threw me off. When has Tea ever called him master? What are they ...

I like Riverlight! hehe It's so cool. I can actually imagine a tune to it, but I wish I knew what it actually was. *shrugs* This is really good. And ...

Hmm...sounds like a good idea. hehe Star Wars...I like how you started it out with "Fear.That is an understatement of what the Dark Empire could cause on some planets." I ...

Ok Amelia already said what I was going to say...well sorta. Anyways I'll still say it! The boy showed up, The next day. He came and Wiped her tears away. ...

YAY! Raed is dead! Now it's Jared's turn. Right?? Right?? Aw come on! Tell me! Lol jk Sig. It was awesome. One thing though, When the people like Quinn and ...

Awww poor Tea! I feel so bad for her. And As much as I hate Jared, I despise Raed. He's an Ass!!! I was like, "Shut up and let the ...

Oh my god. I loved it! I loved the kiss and then they try pretending it didn't happen. It was so cute! In my opinion. I Like Quinn a lot. ...

Hey Elliot. (I hope I spelt that right) This was nice. I Really wish I had something to say about it but I sorta don't. I think the pattern was ...

well...Claudette already said everything wrong with I get to say what's right!:D I like it. It reminded me of DisneyLand! And it's coolz. And like Oregongirl said, I like the ...

Hey Sam, This is coming along great! Its plot is good and I love the detail. And I have no harsh/mean critiques on this. I know, SO disappointing. woah that's ...

Ok. Well I love your writing so, or well this story, It's hard for me to say anything. But...I don't really think the ending was forced. It's good so far. ...