LilyPhelen

I'll be taking these into consideration thanks so much I'll be posting chapter 2 soon!

thanks for the feedback I'll take those into consideration! and yeah it's going to be an ongoing joke about Mrs.Krocker quoting Oscar Wilde. I'll be posting the next chapter soon!

(p.s. not every chapter has bad foul language and mature content but I will keep them all this rating just in case someone starts it and can't finish reading!)

oh, looking back now that makes more sense. . . must of spaced it XD

That sounds like an absolutely adorable puppy. Very good use of sensory language! keep writing poetry. I'd try different styles as well! it's always good to get creative. keep writing ...

Thanks for the constructive criticism! I understand your concern for the lack of subject in many sentences, but this was supposed to be a dramatic piece so in use of ...