LilyJamey

Road To Destruction Chapter 1 I got up at 6:30am , like every morning, and I put on some of my new clothes that I bought. I looked HOT! *1* ...

My corrections are in bold . A new day, new house, new everything. My name is Abagail, but my friends (now old friends), call me Abby. I moved from Augusta, ...

Frankly, I already have a sort of prejudice against this kind of storyline. So feel free to ignore what I might say about the plot. Also, you have to review ...

Oo, Angel, it sounds like one of those 17th century loveletters.. at least, that's how I imagine they were. I really liked this piece, but it was far too short! ...

My first review in forever! I feel so guilty. But it's Chinese New Year, so.. what the hey. Waiting in line is often a dull and mind numbing task. Especially ...

As Cat said, go review! You need two. It isn't too late to make up now. Chapter One I was born July 1, 1991. I was always the cute little ...

Prologue I walked into the air-conditioned mall, already smelling the deep-fried corn dogs in the food court. 1 I walked thru the mall, it was loud from the chattering and ...

Firstly, the “'James?” The voice began, “It’s me, Erik.” ' is the wrong way round, as is the sentence after it. Then "We hung up and I got out of ...

Honey, I think you should put it under Other instead. It sounds like a poetry-prose hybrid. It's really sweet, though. The only part I disagree with is the last bit. ...

I liked this, mostly because there were no grammatical errors. There are some sentences I don't agree with, though. “…and here, on December 4, 1947, we welcome Leon Perso.” I ...

DATE: 18/6/0* A gun was held to Azrael’s head, Wonderful, just how I like to start my day. Italicise, perhaps? Azrael smiled at the man and gave him a peck ...

I like the beginning. It started out great. But somewhere along the line, it just started feeling like you wrote a plotline to get it all out (don't call me ...

For Castlesinthesky's contest, I picked picture number 7. He had been thrown unceremoniously into the cell, landing hard on the cold stone floor. James tried to stand, but his cruel ...

Um, when you say, "Everyday, I write a letter," does that mean that the wind blows everyday, and you close the window everyday, everyday, you stop and decide to use ...

Behind the mountains the midnight blue waters float under the full moon. In front of the waters a wooden dock sits. Cliche. If this is an outline, you can omit ...