Lily708

Hey MagicAce!!!! Your poem's beautiful...incredibly beautiful!! Love the way you start with the rose to describe nature's beauty.I might not have any suggestions for you 'cause I'm still an amateur ...

Thanks a lot for your review MJTucker...:) I'll try replacing those words you picked out..your hints are great!!!!:3

Hey,Silverberry!! Thanks a lot for your review,some of the hints you gave like dividing the poem,didn't strike me at all...was really helpful though.Umm..and yeah I'll try replacing the word dynamo ...

Hey!!! It's Lily here... It's a Beautiful Poem..like really beautiful!!!! The way you described the star in your hand....was awesome!! and...."Once you've inhaled the stars they tend to never let ...