HEELLO Lily,
A poem about music. Music is a wonderful thing. There are so many different genres, so many different styles, so many different instruments and choices. Music is for everybody.
"My heart's like a drum, beating faster." I can feel it. The music pounding in my veins. This happens often during after school dances at my school, when everyone can just socialize and bring out the true you through your dance moves.
"Music rings to death and life it calls." When music plays, we are all very much alive. Alive and crazier than before, almost like we're drunk if you know what i mean.
The rhyming in the line for the piano seems kind of off. The beat suddenly changes and I kinda lost the rhythm when I read the dynamo part. Also, some parts of the poem rhyme, but other parts don't. That made it kinda confusing when I read it. Just a tip.
Pals. That's a nice word.
Your pal,
Night Kaizer
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