Heyyo it's voiceofdragons here for a review!!
I love love poems about the night sky!! It's so sweet.
"Today I took a star straight from the night sky." I love the imagery that was somehow painted from such a short sentence here. I really can see someone stretching as far as they can and just plucking a star from the sky like one would a blackberry off of a bush.
"Felt the rough edges and cupped the light so only I could see." I think it's interesting to describe the star as rough and not mention anything about the temperature. Seems somehow intangible but even more enchanting. I also feel like cupping the star for only the one's person's eyes is a very child like thing to do. So now I see a small child marvelling a star. It's very cute!! Ah.
"I crumpled it in my hand some of the ends pushing into the soft flesh of my palm." The star can be crumpled? Very interesting image here!
"I kissed my star, then breathed in its sweet perfume of flame and honey, wet sand, and meteor showers--but I choked on the star dust." I like the possessive "my" here. The words you use to describe the scent of the star is very neat too! Each of those scents is very distinctive and I can practically smell them. I like the choked on star dust but. I have no idea why but I do.
FLOWERS OF SPACE
I LOVE IT??? and the description of the flower/star growing roots in their lungs ?? That's super cool! So the star dust is kinda like seeds? How neeeeat!!
"I should have known never to take what belongs only to the heavens" once the narrator called the star theirs I figured this bit would happen.
That last line is so ominous I love it.
I really enjoyed this!! The works of Qinni came to mind while reading this. If you haven't seen her works I really recommend looking her up!
Keep up the awesome work!!
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