LighterJames

Hi Sarah. I really like the overall ideas you're trying to get out with this. Your execution is superb, and I love how you word certain things. The only problem ...

I like what you are doing here. One suggestion I'll make is to change the line "Letting the wind beat me into submission." The line, and, more specifically, the word ...

Since you're going for a poem with form, you might want to consider making the third line of the first four stanzas start with "My hero..." The final stanza using ...