Hero

Funny...
Hero
The stereotype says
They wear tights and a cape
My hero is different
He wears a leotard and drapes

They usually fly
Up high in the sky
He doesn’t
He stomps pies

They’re supposed to be strong
Lifting up cars
Though mine is stupid
He walks through tar

They’re supposed to have weaknesses
Something that makes them fickle
My hero gets distracted
By the mere thought of a pickle

They also have a logo
That gives them luck
But my hero’s dead
He was eaten by a duck

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LighterJames
Review

Since you're going for a poem with form, you might want to consider making the third line of the first four stanzas start with "My hero..." The final stanza using "But my hero..." would make an effective change in tone to bring us to a close.

Suggested changes are in italics (minus the punctuation I added):

The stereotype says
They wear tights and a cape.
My hero is different -
He wears a leotard and drapes.

They usually fly
Up high in the sky.
My hero doesn’t -
He stomps pies.

They’re supposed to be strong
Lifting up cars.
My hero is stupid -
He walks through tar.

They’re supposed to have weaknesses
Something that makes them fickle.
My hero gets distracted -
Dilled at the mere thought of a pickle.

They also have a logo
That gives them luck.
But my hero’s dead -
He was eaten by a duck.

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Duskglimmer
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LOL

This is hilarious. It made a nice break in my stressful day. Thanks for posting it. it was great!



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