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Ditto the guy above me on the length issue. I definately think you dragged it out too long. That is, however, quite fixable. I do think it was a good ...

It's a pretty good poem, but I agree, you should elaborate a little more. Filll it out. Complete the thought. I really like the first two stanzas. One specific suggestion ...

Very good, very good. I agree with the others, the rhythm, at times, threw me a little. There were a couple times when it was kind of stop/start, stop/start. It ...

I'd have to agree with the first two replies to your work-I think you should lengthen it, expound further on the idea. But I really do like the idea (especially ...