Lena.Wooldridge

Hey Nikki, I'm here as requested :) NITPICKS There really aren't many. Thanks so much for actually proofreading your work. I did not find any obvious grammatical errors in this. ...

All of your semi-colons are unnecesary, just so you know. Also, I'd pick cooler names. Stan and Beth are kind of boring. Also, whats their relationship? Are they friends? hmm. ...

Hey Twixt, welcome YWS. NITPICKS Honestly, I read this pretty thoroughly, and didn't find very much. Stood at the front of a queue of ten people, Ian started to feel ...

Not gonna lie, I liked your first one better. The letter is just so blunt, that it makes it almost comical. Sorry to say. Also, when the wife hangs herself, ...

This is written very well. Being completely honest there. I just have a few issues with it... :arrow: Burn victims that are burnt that intensely, all over their face, don't ...

Jeeze, this is kinda sad, depressing :( Hope everything is okay with you. Just a couple quick things, starting with the drugs. Say "dose of speed" instead of the ecstasy ...

Heeeeey I'll critique this if you really need help. Just saying, but this is way too short to be a full chapter. from gravities hold Here you are trying to ...

Hey Zeek! Nice to see a new face at YWS. This is very well-written. Keep writing. :?: Is the main character in this really an albino ferret? I'm sorry, but ...

Just want to say that this was like the most hilarious thing I've ever read. Your MC is amazing. You've totally made him, like, 3-D. Wish I could write something ...

You are obviously a very talented writer, this is very nice. Not too many obvious grammatical errors either. :arrow: The word "then" is incorrect here. It should be "than." When ...

Hey! First off, this was a very well-written piece. I have a few nitpicks however. 1) Plural words do not need an apostrophe (') Some day’s when I was alone ...

Alright, so for the most part, this is written pretty good. I enjoyed reading this a lot. But I do have some Nitpicks... 1) When you use a big word, ...

This was written pretty well. There's just a couple things I have to say: 1) The overuse of the word "had" is annoying. You should use that word as little ...

Pshhh this wasn't a train wreck at all. It's actually really good. Like, really really good. The only problem is that nearly all the sentences are run-ons. But this is ...

Keawrite- Before I even attempt to review this, I'd have to ask that you break up the paragraphs just a little bit. The huge paragraphs are really quite intimidating for ...