Lena.Wooldridge

I really enjoyed this. Some of your sentences were somewhat difficult to understand and could be edited in order to be made clearer. However, I absolutely loved the theme of ...

I really enjoyed this. The majority of the descriptions were very believable. I actually really liked this so far. Your character definitely has a voice and distinct personality and I ...

Hi there, First off, in the description, you said that this was an assignment for your English class. In that case, I'm surprised you had the audacity to choose to ...

I just want to say that I don't think you should make this a prologue. In general I believe that writers, especially young, beginning writers, tend to overuse prologues. This ...

One of the best tips I can give to anyone in regards to writing is simplification. For example, this text begins with this sentence: "I’ve learned to realize that the ...

I found this to be very well-written and captivating, which is something that I rarely say about writing that I find on this site. You did a very good job ...

My only comment is that this goes by way too fast and is very predictable. For example: He searched for Renee furiously, but couldn't find her. He finally found her ...

It pretty much sounds like this is a personal anecdote - coming from actual experiences in your life. It almost sounds like a summary of an exciting afternoon/night you have, ...

The parts where you introduce alcohol seem sort of forced, to the point where it is not very realistic. I'm not the best reader, so I don't really understand what ...

First off, it is well known that second person is the weakest form of narrative. There are very few cases in which it actually works and has a positive effect ...

In order to get more reviews, I would suggest breaking up the paragraphs and shortening the piece all together. This is very daunting to simply look at. Remember that you ...

Hey I honestly didn't read through this all the way because I simply do not have enough time. I opened this simply because my family was among some of the ...

lifts the phone from it's receiver should be "its." The apostrophe indicates the conjunction of "it is," not the possessive form of "it." of an elder woman I'd change that ...

Some parts seem slightly cheesey, like they were taken straight out of a history book. "Hey! You there, doughboy! Do you see anything Boche?" I ask, using a slang term ...

I'm rather confused about the ending... Did they kill him or something? I don't think they euthanize autistic people... But, other than that, this was really beautiful and sad. Sometimes ...