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This seems very apathetic. By the end, there should be some kind of emotional conclusion about why it's important that the second person won't look back at the first person ...

At first glance, this appears to be a collection of sentence fragment, especially since there are often words missing in them. If you'd like me to go through this more ...

I really like the idea of this poem, the whole "How do you write a whole poem? BAM! There it is!" ^_^ To that extent, this poem works very well. ...

Aloha, Kalliope! Yay NaPo poems! Right now, it seems a little disjointed, given the linebreaks. here's a suggestion for rearranging: Last night I slammed the door behind me. Now it ...

This reminded me a lot of Poe's Anabell Lee ^_^ It had the same kind of sad inevitability to it, and inverted repetition and rhythm. It was cool. I was ...

First, as to your questions ^_^ Yes, holey is a word, meaning that something is full of holes, as you said. Though, even if it wasn't a word, you used ...

I love reading what you write, Sam. Enough said ^_^ Part One: I like how we're just thrown right into the story and it's so chock-full of images. It's very ...

It has been a dreadful night. The images floated back into her mind. The Lunar Cast brought the joy of harvest. But along with it, The Night Creature. No man ...

Ciao, OE! I'd forgotten that I'd commented already, lol. But I think you've changed it since then? You have a few different images: lies slip, truth tastes, lies pile, there's ...

I really like the first two lines; they just fit together so well. Additionally, this just became my favourite example of a rhyming poem ^_^ We're living on remains of ...

Hi Nolan; welcome to YWS! This poem covers a rather tricky subject. Because of the subject matter, I've bumped the rating to PG-13. Now, let's look at a few things ...

Melody Lowe took a bite from her chocolate bar, looked out of her car window and, to her dismay, saw very little. There were a few scraggly trees, several shrubs ...

First of all, 3-Damentional, thank you for properly rating this ^_^ Yes, it's especially crass, but you're also right; given the ending, it works with the poem. And that is ...

Quick mod note: I upped the rating from PG-13 to R for heavy instances of swearing. Welcome to YWS, mercipourlevenin!This is very much poetry (just to confirm since you already ...

Hello again; you asked about how someone can be put in the middle of a poem, so here I am ^_^ Don't act like me, I promise I won’t act ...