Leja

eh, crudeness aside, I suppose the only thing I have to say is that you've put the words together very nicely. And I just might have liked the rhyming here. ...

From the title, the reader can infer that the poem is about the narrator being a nomad. But what does that mean? Of what consequence is it in other aspects ...

First, may I say I really like the title? Because I do :D Lovely premise! I like very much. Especially the first few lines in relation to the last few ...

The rhymes made me think of this more as song lyrics than a poem; like they're something to be spoken or sung rather than read. Your body feels broken apart, ...

There doesn't seem to be much here. Not because it's so short, because there can be incredibly weighty poems that only last a few lines, but I felt like you ...

I really liked the bleeding pheromones/soldier part in the beginning, but I think the following adjectives just bogged things down without adding much that was helpful. It's something that works ...

And here, on the oceanside - bone framework starved to ashes - the melody sings back to me, the beguiling tides of years before. ^ nice! I had to read ...

Oh, The Thief Lord was nice ^_^ though I watched the movie first. And I suppose I got caught up in the setting more than the story XD But Inkheart ...

He was fifteen when got published, but no big deal about that. Catherine Webb was fourteen, and her books are brilliant. Exactly! A good book's a good book, no matter ...

It's an epilogue? But you say it's just the first part, so did you mean prologue? Hiroko (Annoyed) You ask me the same question every morning, and I give you ...

I didn't find this particularly romantic. The two characters just seemed to go on and on bickering with or analyzing each other. EDIT: to finish the crit... Dialogue can be ...

I rather liked the premise of it, actually. And self-deprecation will get you nowhere. Most of what I'd like to critique is the wording. There are alot of pronouns and ...

I'm here in bed, but my mind is still in that suffocating office cube at work. You should work on showing rather than telling. The office cubicle might be suffocating, ...

There are alot of "pretty" phrases here, that sound good if you're passively listening, but if you were to look closer, they're really just empty words. And in something so ...

telling our stories, an uneven bootleg of memory and mythology, to anyone who will listen: the River Oaks story, the Galveston story, the romantic subplot in League City that changed ...