Leahweird

Normally, I can't get into poetry that uses repitition, yet I really liked this one. Each "fear" is both a seperate thought and a smooth transition. Your language was perfectly ...

Reading this, I could almost feel the sensation of slipping away regardles of your own desires. Just beautiful. My one criticism is the I don't like "physicale plane" in this ...

This is a really well-written piece. I disagree with the previous comment about your use of high end language. I love it, but than I'm fairly verbous myself. I would ...

You are doing really well for someone who has just started. A good rule of thumb that I would like to share with you is that nothing should go into ...

I don't think you need the prologue. Everything the reader needs to know is integrated within the story itself. I think it would improve the sense of mystery that is ...

I really like the style of this, but I think you might have some trouble with typos and things. For example, this phrase: "Your experiments Your freedom Are going to ...

This is really lovely. Very evocative. My only critique is that the end doesn't have quite the same strenghth as the beginning. Also the word dittles is bothering me. I ...

I have very little to say unfortunatly. The second part scared me a litlle, but it was good. I really loved the first part. My favorite element was the switch ...

I don't actually like the rhyme scheme for this one. I hate it when people say that to me, because it's not something you can just change. I have to ...

I think everyones aready sung your praises, but I had to point out one line that turned your story from awsome to stellar. I think I’d been waiting my whole ...

I've finnally decided to coment, but I've read them all, and enjoyed them. I just want to say that I really love the contrast between Josie's growing feelings for nina, ...

I find myself very intrigued about all the siblings in this peice. I despretly want to find out more about them, as well as te lead and her betrothed. I ...

It would soon rain, and the beautiful cadences of morning would be lost forever. I love this line. Particulaly the word Cadences. Elizabeth picked up the hem of her skirt ...

Exquisite piece. I really loved the line about "her cellophane skin". I don't know if that's classified as a metaphor or what but it sounds beautiful. The only thing I ...

*bursts into wild applause* Beautiful, simply beautiful. I love the juxtaposition between traditional beautiful things like sunsets and hot choclate with the fresh. "Tell me about silence" gives me sh