Lauren2010

This was interesting and I enjoyed it. Good job! :) Character development: I felt you did a really good job with this, especially with giving the reader an emotional feel ...

This was really interesting, definitely different. I liked the voice it had, and how it didn't flow like your typical "story". I definitely liked it. I don't see much to ...

Hey there! I'm Lauren, I'll be reviewing for you today :) I'll be taking a good look at your Prologue (because I don't have so much time :/) It starts ...

Wow, this was pretty good! Jetpack seems to have covered a lot (especially grammer) so I'll just go to what I thought. This was very relatable. I understand your characters ...

Wow this was really interesting, not at all like I had expected from the start. So great job with that. I feel like your characters were well expressed in this ...

It certainly makes my like worth living. should be "life" I’m not your average kid, as you may have guessed. "Kid" sounds like the wrong way to refer to this ...

I personally think the beginning fine. Though I didn't understand the actuality of the statement until reading further, which I think helps give the fact of being bred an impact. ...

This was pretty good, an interesting perspective. Your characters were pretty good though, and the setting was decent (though the description could have been better). I don't really see much ...

This was very good for an excerpt! I felt connected with the scene and the characters even though this is (probably) not where the characters are first introduced. It interested ...

Wow, this was different. It kind of gave the whole funeral thing a bit of a different light. I enjoyed the script analogies throughout the story. And your description was ...

Hey there, and welcome to YWS! I really enjoyed this piece. From the beginning you set a tone that stuck with it to the end. Your characters were developed well ...

Hey! I'm Lauren and I'll be reviewing for you today. Wow this was really good! It was very much unlike anything I have read lately. I'd be interested in what ...

Wow, this was fantastic! A very interesting interpretation of an "organ donor". I especially like the monitor that communicated with her, it was interesting and unique. The only thing I ...

Hey there! I'm Lauren and I'll be your reviewer today! First, I'd like to say that this was very interesting and different. I like the fact that it's centered around ...

This isn't very long, so I'll just quote it all and focus on grammer... As the snow falls it turns red against the blood of that monstrous creature I killed. ...