Lauren2010

I got so behind with this, and I'm terribly sorry! I'm here now, though, and that's all that matters! :) This was a really great chapter! I loved the description ...

Hi MilkNCookies! :D This is really interesting! I like the spin of the cult, not something you see a lot in fantasy stories like this and it works! I love ...

Hey goofysmurf! Well, I have to say I'm a little confused. I can see this has been edited some 14 times, so perhaps there was once a full story here ...

Hey Kiki! Well, there's certainly a lot going on here isn't there. There's a lot of really interesting stuff happening, a lot of good stuff for making a story, but ...

Hi there theonewhodreams! Alright, so first off, the random language of the first stanza is a little off-putting. I ran it through a translator several times trying to figure out ...

Hey Jas! First, the only real nitpick I had: "What are you doing?" I said, changing my mind last second on calling her a stupid poopface. It should be "you" ...

Hey Carbon! This was an interesting little fairy tale (I read the description on the novel page) and it works alright as such, but it doesn't feel entirely complete. Even ...

Hey jasmine! Here for a review! :) First, my only nitpick: Shock was clear in his eyes somehow melding with this dazed, stoned sort of look, like he was actually ...

Hi Silent! :D Nitpicks first: And an expensive-looking watch on his wrist. My fingers twitched. This line came really abruptly in an awkward sort of way. When I was reading, ...

Back again, Ray! Another great chapter! I'm loving all the twists and turns, and your pacing is just perfect for this story. I really liked how he didn't go all ...

Hey Ray! Back again for another review! Wow, killer ending! The progression of the plot is really good; it's paced well, and interesting too. I thought I might have known ...

Hey Ray! (Hah, that rhymed xD) I'd actually like to disagree with what everyone has been saying about journal format. Mostly because this doesn't completely strike me as already being ...

Hey there! First, the nitpicks: Dinner would’ve been served hours ago if it wasn’t for the deepest of conversations. The wine is getting more bitter, as we proceed to laugh ...

Hey Cspr! This was a really interesting piece! I really like the main character's (Blaze?) voice and how he talks/thinks throughout the narrative. It's solid, which makes for a good ...

Hey Paul! Lauren here for another review! :) Ignoring the pain in his back and his legs and his neck, he managed to backward-crab-walk for a few feet before stumbling ...