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Hi fortis! On my phone so don't mind any glaring typos xD So like everyone else I very much enjoyed reading this! I love the idea behind it and the ...

Hello Crimsona! Here as requested. :3 You certainly have a lovely way with words! There are so many wonderful lines and metaphors through here, and I especially love the way ...

Hiya pen! Lauren here as requested~ This is quite the lovely poem. Your images are strong and clear, and do a lot to create an overall atmosphere. You definitely have ...

Hi there penprincess! :D Here as requested~ A lot of folks have touched on grammar/construction issues so I won't repeat all the things they said and get on to content ...

Hey there, Africa! Back at long last for some more reviewing~ Page Twelve And Minerva. He did not want her to have been a dream. Here is when I try ...

Hi there Fiend! Here to review~ I suppose my main structural issue is that this doesn't have any of the qualities of a successful essay (thesis, evidence, support, conclusion, etc). ...

And I'm back for more ^^ Page Ten He worked with a few women; he had dated, disastrously, in secondary school and once at university; but it had been a ...

Back again! Page Eight The banter between the Ringmasters here is delightful and fun, but I have a hard time seeing what use it has for the story as a ...

Back again! Let's get to it, shall we? Page Six A mystical carnival in the park? Count me in! The description of this scene from afar is lovely and I ...

And I return! Happy Review Day! Here's to more Book Man. ^^ Page Five The balloon-artist could annoy him like no one else, but he never arrived at the real ...

Hi defiantAuthoress! This is a really lovely little poem! I like how you take one simple image - two hands resting close to one another - and pull out such ...

Back again! Page Four Magical parks? Count me in baby! I knew this was going to be a fantasy, and I've been waiting to see where that would come up. ...

And here I am again! Okay so can I just say how much I adore the exchanges between Cadogan and Collins, especially at the beginning of this chapter. Collins is ...

Twit! Better late than never, ja? So I can totally get behind this chapter. In the first chapter, there was a lot left in the open and a lot that ...

Blue! I was going to jump on your chapters still sitting in the Green Room, but ended up breaking down and deciding to head back to the start and review ...