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Hey Yuriiko! I've got some critiques for you. ;) Corrections in Red Your heart is beating fast. Goosebumps start to send chills all over your body but it isn’t the ...

This idea isn't unique or original at all, but somehow I couldn't stop reading! You made it so relate-able. Any girl (or boy) knows what it feels like to have ...

Hi wickedwonder! I really did like this. The story was simple and relate-able. I never get tired of teen angst. My favorite line was this one: Fast forward to Halloween ...

Hey ShaddowSoldier! So I'm going to start off by saying I like the concept of this story. People say dragons have been over done in fantasy, but I absolutely love ...

Gah! D: Stupid man! Such a pig. I wish Nigha could come back to life. What's going to happen to her mom and her dad? This is so sad :(. ...

Holy Cow! My heart was racing! Megsug was right, you do have talent. She pretty much covered everything in her review. I just wanted to say that I loved it. ...

Aw! Broken hearts suck :(, but this story doesn't! I like the story, but it was pretty choppy and sometimes confusing. Examples: I had said hi after that he had ...

Hey guitargirl! I quite enjoyed this piece. There are a few things I would like to point out that would make it better though. Leaves crunched under my Converse sneakers ...

Woah woah woah! Slow down! You just spit four chapters worth of story into one paragraph! I think I got whip-lash. Other than the multitude of spelling and grammar mistakes, ...

Hello wickedwonder! This story was nice and casual. Short but good. If you wanted to make it great you could have thrown in some anecdotes about the MC's life and ...

Hey Megsug! I thought this short story was very good! It was surprising when the wife didn't feel any pain for her husband's death and I loved it. Even though ...

Holy Mussolini, I wish I could write like this in a red bull powered tizzy! I loved every line of this. I ate it up like a pancake breakfast and ...

Hey Caitlyn! I really enjoyed this story so far. The orphanage idea is a pretty over-used idea, but I didn't notice so much because the characters were cool and interesting. ...

I have to say I agree with Flower-Child. Though I read your post about this being about drugs, I am still confused by it. You didn't really convey much emotion ...

As Wicked Wonder pointed out, there are quite a few grammatical and spelling mistakes that can be easily fixed. If you aren't very good with that sort of thing, try ...