Lantalamiste

This isn't bad, but it could use work. I totally understand what it's like to have to write a poem at the last minute and not coming out with something ...

Hmmm... I do like this, but I agree with Evi, it could use more. For instance, why can't 'you' resist? Where does this strong desire to kill come from? It ...

I like this poem a lot, but it could use a little tweaking. The only thing I really have left by way of criticism that no one else has already ...