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Valoc drove his mace into the strigoi's skull ???? This is a little confusing. Please clarify. It is stated he carries a mace, and it is stated that the strigoi ...

I shall be interested to see on what criteria people are judged worthy of living. :P

I might have found the book an exciting read if I had read it one hundred years ago. I forced myself through it because, hey, it's Dracula. And yes, the ...

Thank you everyone for your advice and comments. I know that on its own it is quite short, but it will be fine with a story following it. I'm currently ...

Well... I edited the post and now my beloved indents are gone and won't come back, so I guess the problem is solved. Thanks.

Thanks. whispered a gravely voice -- apparently Microsoft Word denounces the existence of gravel. plane = plane However, since it seems a bit obscure, I can use a synonym.

Haha. Pretty good. "Why-baby" is the funniest name I've heard in a while. That alone cracked me up.

Evidently you did outdo me. Punk. :(

*                                                         Too Beautiful The most beautiful woman in the world lived alone by a river.      Â

Thanks for the reviews; two more than I expected. Good point, Siegfried. I'll pay more attention to that. (although I won't bother changing it with this. Only really did it ...

Poor word usage on my part probably--Hedretti cares for her, being his wife, but obviously does not have much pity, particularly for the poor (a lot of men are like ...

allegiance to Jyslan decay~ I meant by that that Maviance did not let the circumstances--the possibility that her unborn child is a demon and is therefore athreat--get in the way ...

REVISED! Tell me if it's better? (don't have to re-critique, just whether you think it's better or not) *** Thanks for the pointers, Amelia and Writers, I'll definitely try and ...

Thanks for the comments, you guys. Amelia - You made some good points and I've amended the story in several places where you enlightened me as to their clumsiness. :P ...

I thought outside the box a bit, and can make that paragraph make sense, it's just that-- When the gargoyle says, "one less shmuck on god's green earth," I thought ...