Kylan

The thing that confused me about Ivan's death was that when he was still hallucinating, I thought that Todd shot him in the stomach. I don't know a whole lot ...

Thanks for your guys' help with this. And I'm glad you all enjoyed it ^_^. Part 2 of 2 is out. See if you like it. -Kylan

The shining characteristic of all of your writing is your strong, clipped, omnipresent voice. You easily describe emotions and personality with each sentence which makes your characters vivid and uniq

Thank you both for your positive critiques. I'm glad you liked it. "Marble... Characters see no evil hear no evil speak no evil" It was supposed to be charters . ...

The Latin phrase sub rosa means "under the rose" and is used in English to connote secrecy or confidentiality. The poem was a statement of the stifling of free speech. ...

Okay. You have now completely delved into the realm of historical fiction. And frankly, the piece hit me as underesearched and slightly cliche. You've got to understand that the fat ...

I'm guessing you're making fun of those YWS members who aren't decisive enough to name their work, let alone write something worthewhile. Clever, clever, clever. A worthy satire, my dear ...

Thanks Smorg! Great help. But, you know, I'm not feeling this story. I think I'm gonna bag it. It doens't...resonate. One day, eventually, I might ressurect this and use your ...

They’re coming. Up the mountain, in lumbering jeeps that have squad automatics mounted on their backs, manned, loaded, ready to blow the living hell out of us. Underneath the rumbling ...

Thanks for the crits you guys! Suzanne>> Several things you commented on will be explained later in the story (ie: the wires/ why they didn't kill Hitler earlier). I agree ...

Nice work -Kylan

This is good. seems to missing something. Everything is happening so quickly, like you shoved this story into a washing machine on put on fast-cycle. Slow down, girl. I want ...

Actually, Golney, "The man" shows up sporadically throughout the entire novel. He's essentially the main antagonist, but the reader isn't ready to know who he is yet. Ironically, Yuan is ...

Sorry, was I too harsh? -Kylan

Hunter - As you said, Saint, he definitely wouldn't be holding the gun around the barrel. How embarrassing! I totally meant butt/stock. Typing one thing, thinking another... As for my ...