Kylan

Thank you for your input, Grif. I'll take your comments into consideration. However, I feel like I need to justify myself somewhat. First of all, I'm curious as to whether ...

The fantasy is coming... :wink: Anyway, thank you all for your critiques and praise. Part two is up and expect #3 (part 1) tomorrow maybe. -Kylan

Proluge = prologue -Kylan

Thank you very much for taking a look at this Cassandra. I glad you enjoyed it to some extent. Also, remember to put capital letters where they are required I ...

Thank you all for your comments! Roughly three weeks ago, I submitted this piece to Shimmer Zine for publication. However, they decided to pass it up and gave me these ...

I'm sorry, but I can't critique this until 'vicious' is spelled right in your title. -Kylan

Thank you both for your comments. Medusa >> Actually, this piece has nothing to do with the superhero. I was trying to conjure up images of a big, awkward, 'heartless' ...

Notice my avatar. The Book Thief is pure art. -Kylan

“Your turn.” I handed the controller reluctantly to my idle friend. He was still grinning from my mediocre game. “What! You got something to say,” I retorted . He just ...

Well, it really doesn't matter what forum you post this in. A strong, action-oriented beginning is the best way to start any literary piece, regardless of genre. You want to ...

Thanks, Gwen. I believe I sent you a PM in response to your comments. -Kylan

Again, thanks to all! I've made a few changes, particularly to the ending line. Hopefully it's better now. -Kylan

Nice job, smorg. Your improvements have made GTG pristine. I have fallen in love with this piece: a perfect dystopian projection of the future (or a metaphor of the present). ...

Thanks you two! Your advice is extremely helpful. Sugar >> You mentioned that the use of charlatan is incorrect. You're right. That's what I get for using a thesaurus without ...

That was great Sam! You have this way of pulling storytellng off effortlessly and in a way that makes me desperately want more. This piece is lean, dark, attractive, and, ...