Kylan

Well... Kinda plotless at the moment...Hopefully it will get better. It seems, though, that this is sort of "dream" write. Meaning, you present a situation which isn't very realistic/too perfect. ...

Hey Gena!! Glad you found some time to post another piece. You really have talent!!! I only have a coople comments... First off, you are missing a lot of commas. ...

Woot! Stick it to the man Lady Pirate! Anywyas, now that that's done with... It was very short. Quotes are short. The back of cereal boxes are short. Poems, in ...

This was very good! Your style is smooth and flowing and gives the reader a very clear image of what was going on. Your characters so far are believable and ...

You have a fantastic writing style! Very fresh. Very gripping. Very real. Everything that was mentioned in this piece was relatable. Especially the part about the whiteheads and zits and ...

I thought this was fantastic!! In my opinion much more masterfully done than your prologue! Your style of writing is very intriguing and you rarely tell (a good thing. Something ...

Hey! This was pretty good. :D Very orginal. I only have a few tips. Before her lay her ceiling fan along with a sizeable portion of her ceiling that had ...

That was great! You really left me hanging there at the end!! You've got a great writing style... I've only a few comments... In the beginning, when you describe the ...

I read the unabridged version in seventh grade and considered it my life's greatest accomplishment at the time. It is a fantastic book!! I remember exactly where I was at ...

Wow! That was a fun piece to read :lol: . Your action segments are great and really keep a reader hooked. I've only got a coupla comments... Dreg towered over ...

Hey writersdomain!! As always, excellent. You're description and characterization is very real. I've got a coupla comments... Okay, so why is Creiha having all of these fainting spells??? She only ...

Good! I've just a coupla comments. There really is no plot. If I wanna read about being a freshman, I'll read my journal (I actually don't have one, but you ...

Hello! Just a few comments: What is the Devil's Walk? I gathered it was a street, but if I was judging it by the description of the magnificent sign, I'd ...

Hey, 92. Remember me??? Even though you probably hate my guts, bear with my critiques... So... Overall, much better than your last chapter. Your characters all have very distinguishable personalities,

Okay, I've got quite a few comments about this chapter. First off, you need to be consistent with your narration. Half of the time you narrarate the story like it's ...