Kraemer

‘666 Evil’s Highway’ Obvious and unlikely. The highway to hell joke got over used with that song. Also not many houses live on a highway "666 Infernal Way" or "666 ...

Kay so... First, I liked the sudden change in pace at the beginning, it was amusing. " Now where was i?" I should be capital. "We all know the story, ...

The boy cursed endlessly. How old is Beliel? He seems a bit old to be called boy. The heavy odor of illegal drugs littered the shop I wouldn't use the ...

pretty good. Even though you called it chapter 1, it almost seemed like an intro. the description was nice. This one's particular craft was blood-reading, an art outlawed in the ...

one mistake I noticed is Living with them in piece… Could his human soul still exist somewhere inside him? it should be "living with them in peace" also, the title ...

I like it..... it's an interesting story. One mistake is What if?[i], he thought repeatedly. [i]What if he's...one of them? as you can see, you put the code for italics ...

good job.. As the man got closer, she could make out his eyes, his evil scorching eyes. Abruptly, the man stopped where he was and raised his arms towards the ...

Wow that's really short.... I tried to go back the way I came. I hit a wall. I was scared, but I knew three things, it was dark, scary, and ...

He pulled out his rosery and said a quick prayor you spelled prayer wrong. certainly an interesting beginning. It all seems to happen a little bit fast though. You might ...

There is no gods, when you die, you die. There are no gods; when you die, you die Although I agree that your tense is wrong here, it seems by ...

You're a big fan of GRRM aren't you. First your identity, then the whole telling Cassandra about the intrigue needed to get support from the nobles Also, why are frowning ...

I hate to say it but you "fear you're becoming normal" we are all normal.... anyone who thinks otherwise is sort of kidding themselves. Sure we are all slightly different ...

Drink yourself drunk with my ale. It seems that the drink yourself drunk is unneccessary. Just share my ale, or quench your thirst or soemething would suffice. Most people, even ...

Not knowing whether not you’re okay. I'm being picky here, but I think it should be whether or not you're okay. It seems to me that you are trying a ...

not bad. actually it reminded me of an Angels and Airwaves song. I found the first bit before the chorus better. Afer, it seems you're trying too hard to rhyme ...