Kiwisatsuma

Hey again! I'm glad you decided to continue this! :D I like the changes you made to the prologue, although I still think it could be clearer that it was ...

Hey there! :) Wow! I wasn't expecting that ending at all, and it worked really well. :D You managed to fit a lot into such a short story. Still, I ...

Hey there! Welcome to YWS and I hope you enjoy your time here! :D So, you described this as a snippet in your author's note, and that's certaintly what it ...

Hey there! Welcome to YWS! :smt003 Nawwww, that was cute. :3 It's always nice to read a story where the nice guys end up together. “That was real low for ...

Hey there! :) Hmm, I like this, especially the way your main character already has her own distinct personality. It seems like an interesting beginning to a novel. A few ...

Hey there! :) This is well-written and definitely intruiging. I have just a few nitpicks: Six short, fast years was all it took In this context chort and fast mean ...

Hey! :) I haven't ever read the Rime of the Ancient Mariner, but I know the general plot of it, and I love the way you've retold it. You have ...

Hey! :) Hmmm, I like this so far. I love the way you've turned it around with the other countries ganging up on the USA. :D It reminds me a ...

Hey there! :) This is an interesting story idea, and I thought you told it well, especially the way you described the darkness and the fear of the narrator. Grammar ...

Hey! :) I think this is a topic lots of people can relate too, and you argued your case really powerfully. I loved this part: That passion is the ink ...

Hey! Welcome to YWS! :D I liked this. You wrote the chase scene well, and I was pretty gripped. Still, I think there are a few things you could improve. ...

Hey there! :) I think this could become a good story beginning, but right now it could definitely be improved. This is a fantasy story, so it's set in a ...

Hey there! :) This story is certaintly interesting. You took an odd, silly prompt and wrote a story that's strange and, upon rereading, quite sinister. Still, I think this could ...

Hey there! :) Wow, I really really like this! I wasn't expecting the twist at all and it worked very well. I love the idea of following a trail of ...

Hey there, As a prologue, I like this. I have only a few nitpicks: She crawled over to the tiny frail body she had carefully wrapped up in the stolen ...