Kit

This is an interesting palate you're working from. Your language and dialogue is so accessible, it feels organic and simplistic, yet the ideas and relationship between them is complex. So ...

Dear Ameliorating Amelia, I actually like your changes quite a bit here, I think it refines it, in it's state now there's an elegance to it, without taking away from ...

This poem made me think of three things, "the Paperbag Princess", "Someone to Watch Over Me", and oddly enough the lyric style of the Dandy Warhols. When I think of ...

Filth! Rot! I completely disagree and disembowel everything my predescessors said of this vile rancour you have the audacity to label "Narrative Poetry". I could smear my feet with fine ...

I disagree with everyone before me. (No, really, Kit? however could that be?) Yes, sharper focus would help this, probably if you got rid of the treadmill, you'd have clearer ...

Bah, you need music for this. Similar tone to "Lilac Wine", on similar subject matter, if you've heard it, Jeff Buckley did a version of it. : See, it's kind ...

Good specifics in imagery. Starts off with the "I'm writing a song about whatever I happen to be thinking about.. and look over there there's something that could be shiney.. ...

That line, and the title, 'the beauty of a rape scene', you don't really do much with it, which is not good. To even talk about rape is taboo in ...

At its best moment's it's got this Queens of the Stoneage "Skin on Skin" feel. And it tint your pinkly cheeks That's my favourite line. "pinkly cheeks" is lovely. We ...

Well, probably one the better lot of Christmas lyrics this year. Moments of ranting, keep your focus tight. I've never met anyone who without fee Would let me sit on ...

Interesting concept. Again, I'm not sure how you're performing this, but I think cutting some of the repetitions would aid you. You have to leave them aching a little, you ...

Thank GOD, another Australian muso. Next time you post lyrics, tell us what you're doing with the music, yeah? Looking through all your lyrics so far, so I'll get down ...

Don't know why no one has commented on this. Probably the fear of long poems with a mighty fear. The tendency these days is towards single idea snapshot kind of ...

This makes sense. It's called "On Winter's Aging", for god's sake it's a basic and common analogy. That's not one of the problems I have about this poem. But iambic ...

Some days I wish I were a fable--I'd be satisfied knowing that soon you'd outgrow believing in me. A lick of metafiction, bless you. This was my favourite stanza, belief ...