Kishanrenlove

Hi! This is a really good, creepy, story. It's long, and you describe the setting really well. The man was described good, too, as well. Also, there were a couple ...

Wow. This is really good, and there are a couple of errors. I'll just say them really quickly: you misspelled cigarette, now I have to make sure I don't misspell ...

This is a really good start for a story, and please continue with this! You created a really distinct place, and a good character to expand on. This diary is ...

Alright, I liked this. It was pretty interesting, despite being only five lines. Still, though, I do wish you would have added more lines, or put a lot more detail ...

Alright, this was pretty interesting. Um, I really enjoyed reading this, and it had a really good start. Is there gonna be explanations on why her father is so cold? ...

Wow, this was really good. I liked how you described really well the amounts of pain that he was feeling, and his thoughts. When he was trying to overcome it, ...