Kirahh

Hello! I write my corrections and suggestions in bold. I’m not sure when it happened really, I was walking home from school it was public you know those kind of ...

Hello there! I write my corrections and suggestions in bold. I pumped my legs, running as I had never run before. Sweat poured off my brow, and occasionally clouded my ...

Hello there! I write my corrections in bold 1 Rhys “Shh, it’s okay, baby,” I cooed as I petted her hair. The girl in front of me was practically trembling ...

Hello! I write my corrections in Bold. A dog washer in South Africa running away from a bear There was once a dog washer in South Africa named Linda Liz. ...

This story is about a palm tree. If you don't like that you can stop reading. (I put a break here because that's where the story starts. We begin our ...

I loved every moment of this! I laughed so hard I'm still tearing :D I adored this part though: Mercutio1594: OMG BENVOLIO HELP ME!11!!1!111!!1!!!! Benvolio: Mercutio? No longer ignoring me, ...

My corrections are in bold :) She doesn't want to pretend anymore . I feel it would add more emphasis if you added periods here. No one really knows who ...

My corrections are in purple: "Hurry up! We're going to be late!" Hailey shouted from ahead. "Sorry Hai-Hai , but I have to tie my roller skate." I said quickly. ...

I really loved your work :D One thing I would have done is break it up into more stanzas, like: They came to me that day, Bowed heads and teary ...

It was a good poem, but it felt like as if you could have explained it better. Don't get me wrong; IT WAS AWESOME! One thing I'd like to point ...

I really liked that :D I loved the way you described things so vivid; I could picture it perfectly in my mind. One thing I'd like to point out though. ...

I enjoyed that a lot! One small suggestion at one line. And I know that there's nothing That I can do to change her mind. I kind of thought that ...

I really liked how you used red for 'lite'. It instantly caught my eye :D One thing; what is the story exactly about? Because I was trying to create an ...

It's a good plot, but it needs a bit more work. For example, his getting more attached could help me none. You could replace that with 'him getting attached to ...

I think the piece is good, but it would have been better if you focused on all the aspects, such as the characters emotions. As someone noted before, you focused ...