Kick_the_sky504

I think that it is a very interesting story. But I think it moves a little fast for them to just automaticly fall for one another. Like maybe they could ...

Before you do more with other chapters. I would go over and rewrite wat you have now. Like they have said above me. More setting more discription. I am horriable ...

I understood it. But I think her normal actions were a bit off for the situation. I don"t tink she would be all happy after something like that appened to ...

All together it was good. But I think that maybe some of the other's from the manga sould be involed. An I thought Tamaki's actions were a little off. he ...

Zelda fanfictions aren't something I normally read. But considering that it isn't something I normally read, you kept my interest. An that is a great thing in itself. Keeping writing. ...