Karsten

okay guys thinks for the comments but that is why my story is called FICTION it wouldn't REALLY happen in life so yeah what now all of your words were ...

Hi Hero, This is a tough review, so I hope you took me seriously when I warned about the bleeding. I think this piece still needs work. Primarily, I'm seeing ...

Hi Kanen, Today's review is courtesy of the Biblical story of David and Goliath, in which the boy David kills a terrifying giant armed with only a sling. It's an ...

Hi Elinor, Quick review for you today. I thought this was clear and fairly well-written. The tenses are a bit shaky though - you need to watch that conditional tense ...

Hi JamieAnn, I'm sorry to say that I had difficulty reading this piece. It has persistent technical errors like punctuation mixups (example: the last semi-colon), tense changes (example: second senten

Hi Cassie, I'm afraid I had difficulty following this story. The character reactions didn't make sense to me. These parents somehow don't notice that their baby is ill, when first-time ...

Hi Forest, I thought the writing here was clear, but the overall story feels heavy-handed to me. One party is 100% evil, a generic bad guy with drug issues thrown ...

Hi romance otaku, I read your post on the Lounge board, and since you're serious about making it as a writer, I wanted to give you my honest opinion. The ...

Hi Ben, Just a few quick comments on the opening. I'm slightly confused by the level of historical accuracy here. I love the fact that you're using the original German ...

It's really difficult to critique something where the capitalisation, spelling, grammar and punctuation are all broken and where the characters don't even have names. You're asking people to spend the

Hi Durriedog, I liked the writing here. It's a little overblown at times, but it's also colourful and full of detail. I also enjoyed a few of the world-building details, ...

Hi OverEasy, Another quick review for another short piece. I liked this chapter more than I thought I would, mainly because Lucy comes across as a fun, sympathetic character with ...

Hi OverEasy, Quick review for a short piece. This prologue reads cleanly, but I feel like I'm struggling to care about this story due to a lack of sympathetic characters. ...

Hi SplitPin, I thought the writing here was clean and readable, save for the occasional lapse into present tense. I did have a problem with how drab the writing feels ...

Hi Con, I love the premise here -- the woman who cut her own throat was awesome! -- but feel that the execution falters a little. I feel like I’m ...