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Hello there. I will be reviewing you this lovely Review Day. That said, I haven't read the previous chapter, so if I bring up a point that was addressed in ...

Hello there. I will be reviewing you this lovely Review Day. :D That said, I haven't read the previous chapters, so if I bring up a point that was addressed ...

Hello there. I will be reviewing you this lovely Review Day. :D That said, I haven't read the previous chapters, so if I bring up a point that was addressed ...

Fantasy was quite thorough, and I really don't have much to add. I do wonder why you decided to post this story now, and what you plan on doing with ...

Hello there. I'll be your reviewer this lovely Review Day. That said, I haven't read the previous chapters. If I bring up a point that was addressed in an earlier ...

First things first, it is spelled "Claus" without the "e". For a moment there, I thought you were talking about the movie "The Santa Clause". Secondly, you ramble a fair ...

Existance, Watch your spelling. Existence is spelled with an "e". Overall, there were two main issues with this piece. The first is the vagueness. The second is that you have ...

You sit on the beach in the sand, your pants rolled up to your knees and barefoot. You really need to rework this sentence. As-is, it reads as if the ...

It was so nightmarish - Sparsile - I agree with Last about the title drop. While I do like the play on the meanings of the word, and having it ...

Lumi, love, here I am as requested. First, allow my to sharpen my talons (though filing them down would be a bit more practical considering they're long enough to be ...

Hello there, Lumi. Here to review the latest edit, as requested. I am sleep-deprived and slightly loopy, so if something doesn't make sense, well, that's probably why. XD When your ...

Live ,Breath and Die There are a couple of mistakes in your title. First, the spacing of the comma is off. Secondly, it should be "breathe" rather than "breath". "Breath" ...

There were a lot of awkward phrasings in this. Leebass has pointed out some of them, but there are others. For instance, with "the occasion was atrocious", "atrocious" really isn't ...

The view had nothing - just A vast stretch of uncultivated land, That made one wonder if something Could really be so barren as the soil Of that field. But ...

Hello there, DANAdeyna, and welcome to YWS. You may want to get around to reviewing other members' works. Not only is it the way to get the points you need ...