Kale

To be honest, I didn't much like this story. You danced around the source of conflict for so long, by the time it was revealed, I no longer cared. There's ...

Starhunter was quite thorough in his review, and I second everything he said. I have to admit, the last paragraph was my favorite. All the mentions of the small events ...

It is a sort of perfection This line really does not flow all that well to my ears. It sounds stilted, so it sticks out negatively, and considering you repeat ...

Heya, Angie. Since you mentioned you posted your poem up, here I am to review it. Now, since this is one of those poems where you're supposed to be honest, ...

Hello there. I realize the contest closes today, so while this review might not be able to help, hopefully you'll be able to apply with I say to future stories. ...

culling memories to be tossed, This line reads oddly. "Culling" implies completely removing, and you can't toss something that has already been removed from your possession. that lets my dry ...

Also agreeing with IcyFlame. Posting each of these separately will make them much easier to read, which will make it more likely people will read and review them. As it ...

This is a bit bare on details. You have the barest, basic premise laid out, but there's no real context or introduction to the memoir, and so there's no real ...

The rhyme in this was so obviously forced, it was painful to read. I only just managed to make it to the third stanza before I gave up and took ...

aching I think having this word on a line all its own is a bit much. It brought the flow to a grinding halt for me as "aching" felt overly-emphasized. ...

Pleasure? It's hard to tell. This did not fit, and it's rather obvious that you inserted this here just to satisfy a reviewer. Even though the cigarette is buried beneath ...

Since this is so short, you'll be getting a rare line-by-line. ;) People don’t stop in the gypsy market. Good first sentence. They keep their hands on their purses and ...

I am guessing this was a spam post posted by a bot as only spam posts are deleted, which leads to awkward, partial conversations floating in midair like the one ...

Hello there. I haven't read the previous parts, but there were a couple of issues that stood out to me that I believe are independent of the rest of the ...

This review is a completely pointless review whose purpose is to be a review only in characters because nobody can rightly review a piece that has been deleted, and seeing ...