Kaggsy

I liked your rhyming too. I found it sort of like a poem that has to be read to a beat, and it sounds really good like that. Your topic ...

I'd say that you should pronounce it GO-bri. It sounds sort of like the person she is turning out to be. Mainly in here, I found a few cliches. I ...

Overall, I thought this was very good. I liked your newfound twist on the whole idea, and I found this a great read as well. Here is just one thing ...

It looks like you are aiming for a set rhyming pattern, but the first and second stanza don't fit. Try going for a more steady rhythm and try to get ...

What is this going to be? An article, an essay, or what? Depending on what it is, you might want to find out a bit more on the subject, write ...

151. Call him Snivellus and offer him tissues frequently. 152. Play hangman with him as the hanging person and purposely go up to his desk to ask for help with ...

[quote]I'll follow myself wherever I go Into the dark, into the snow[/quote] I thought that sounded a tiny bit forced. Just didn't sound quite right. The last two lines were ...