KNS012

thanks for the help, ill try to remember to make it better when I get some rest. I haven't slept well in months, I been waking up at every hour ...

i dont get it......i think you should explain/expand more on your subject, give it depth and meaning.(if you didn't alredi try that lol) Throw some imagery in there. Those were ...

great imagery i like your choice of words it flowed well i didnt notice any grammar mistakes so i guess your good.

i think it needed more of a rhythm towards the middle, but other than that was enjoyable.