KJ

What I liked most about this was the descriptions. You do need some spacing after the people speak, though. Pretty good addition. But I feel like we still don't really ...

I'll think about it =P

Wow, this was pretty good. I liked it. Very action-filled and well-written. I have nothing bad to say, so nice writing. Oh, by the way, my favorite line was when ...

Very prettily written. Your plot build-up is excellent, too.

It was okay. I liked your details and surrounding descriptions. I also liked the mysterious quality to it, used a lot or not. I don't really have anything negative to ...

Anytime.

Really have nothing negative to say. I liked it, thought it was interesting, and well-written. Write on.

Good. Mysterious, descriptive, decent dialogue, catching hook, and you left the reader wanting more. I liked it.

To be completely honest, this is a boring and typical start. Nothing catches the attention, and it's too short to even get into what there is. I really have little ...

I liked this. You did very well describing face expressions, and with your dialogue. I didn't find it boring, sappy, or over-dramatic, either. You go, writer!

I'm not going to say anything on this poem, because I want people to interpret it the way they feel it should be. What do YOU think it is saying? ...

I don't think that I was given enough to really have an opinion on this. Your plot, what we've seen of it, has really only just begun. But what I ...

Again, interesting. But one thing that bothered me was that the child was called "it" several times, when it's clear that "it" is a child. ...Or is it?... Make more ...

I guess the only thing I can say was that it was interesting. I wasn't all that enthralled, but it was well-written.

I didn't really get all that interested in this. I found it dull. I thought the whole going-back-in-time thing corny. I feel that this would be better if the story ...