Jrezek

Hey! This translates to me as a kid rising up and then keeps being knocked down and "suppressed" by the pills that they are making him take. They don't understand ...

Hey! I agree with the review below! Except instead of just loading the sentence up with more descriptive words, you could possibly add a supporting sentence underneath each one, but ...

I don't know much about deep meanings of poetry, but looking at it from the surface you can maybe see "us" as ants? Or something related to ants and lemmings ...

The first paragraph definitely opened the story very well for what you were trying to portray! I definitely got chills as I was reading it. The part I loved the ...