JosephDean

MOVIE VEIWING. "Viewing" is misspelled. --- First, lmao at Jiggity's final comment. :P Anyways, the writing style is definitely kept in the admirable state here. I really enjoyed it. I ...

"Hi Daddy," I say, pretending I'm with the birdmen. Comma after "Hi" I'm sorry Daddy. Comma after "sorry" --- Wow, this is so excellent! The "birdmen" thing is a little ...

I just finished reading the first part to this a few minutes ago and loved it, so I was glad that you had posted this one today. Grammatically and punctuation-wise, ...

Even though it seemed I had 5/20 vision, This assumes that the reader understands that 5/20 is bad... Yeah I know it's obvious to anyone, but it can still be ...

I'll agree with dannyr122. As far as grammar goes, the poem is excellent. Punctuation is not an issue because it's poetry; artistic license rules out comma and period usage :P ...

The only thing that got me on this was how the lines kept changing in syllable numbers drastically, but it's not something to worry about. It's just how you decided ...

Before I say anything, I would like to point out the review to submission ratio that the administrator and moderators like to enforce. I'm sure you all ready know of ...

I made s I can't believe I am this excited either! .... What happened here? In syntax, I mean. It looks like two sentences slammed together, lol. "I look stupid." ...

I like this!! There were only two things that stood out to me: "What do you want?" The tallest of the boys asks, stretching his neck higher to appear taller ...

Wow, this was really well written, you two! It's really obvious during the authour switches though, lmao, but it's supposed to happen when there is more than one. :P I'm ...

Okay, first - it was REALLY good. So much emotion and energy. Second - there are SO MANY mistakes everywhere. It was really hard for me to fully enjoy it ...

Lol, everyone has all ready beaten me to the small critiques I would have made, but I still loved it. It's a great preface or prologue, whichever you prefer. The ...

I really liked it, and all of my own critiques have all ready been mentioned, haha. One thing I'll say though is go ahead and continue writing with your story. ...

I really enjoyed this! Most of the things I picked up on, Rosey has all ready stated. A few other things I saw: Jack Frost himself was turning each and ...

Were they really suggesting that I had ‘built’ David myself; that the love I felt was a lie I told myself? I wouldn't use "myself" twice like that; it just ...