Jon

it's not my poem (although I wish it was ), so maybe... so maybe you'll what? You better not copy this/print it! I know you wouldn't anyways. :D Thank you ...

Thank you june for the crit. I will explain thispoem so all my words are in the right order and make sense. The memories are the scars, meaning they'll never ...

That's okay, And i see this was posted at 11:47 ? you late night owl you :D ---Jon--- :D

“You can hide but you can’t run.”(-cough- I thought the saying went, "You can run but you can't hide."? ) Not with this story.. They can hide but they can't ...

Thanks sarah, sooooo much! This must have taken hours and i really do appreciate it. As i was reading your critique i had to laugh because, And please don't tell ...

Thank you june! You just made my day! I will go back and correct those things and make it better! I'm glad you like it and keep those points! haha ...

Thankyou! and Good Kluck? -- haha! Anyway, yeah... ... This was one of my most horrifying chapters yet because I wrote half of it and then i waited like a ...

Cough. ---Jon--- :D

Thanks emma I will look it over and try to make it better. (the whole one word and all.) :D anyway, thank you. ---Jon--- :D P.S. -- is there anything ...

think you should give it to the One you wrote it for, he'll understand it better than me... He? anyway i think its supposed to be were thanks for the ...

Thanks emily *donates 10 points* ---Jon--- :D

Thanks Mackenzie *Reviews some of your poetry* *Donates 10 points too* Thanks ---Jon--- :D

I don't want to bump this but i need/wan at least one review please? I will review your poetry too. ---Jon--- :D

Please Guys, I really want to make this better and ventually publish it. If you are asking me for anything then ask away, do you want reviews, pm me, points?, ...

Thanks to both of you for the reviews, I have edited the piece and I would still like to make it better, so more reviews please?