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John Locke

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Syrin: Chapter 1

    Hello, my friend. First, might I commend you for your use of the present tense. As a rule, I stray away from the present tense and do so abhor it. ...

    Mon May 05, 2014 4:17 pm
  • Short Story » Mystery / Suspense, Supernatural Re: The act.

    Hello, my friend. First, I have to agree with the reviewer below: this is an extremely suspenseful story. Your writing, though quite graphic, is effective at grabbing the reader's attention. ...

    Sun May 04, 2014 9:37 pm
  • Novel / Chapter » Historical Fiction, Action / Adventure Re: -deleted-

    Hello, my friend. First, simply amazing writing. Your powers of description and imagery are unbelievable. As soon as I read the first sentence, I was drawn in and I refused ...

    Sun May 04, 2014 8:55 pm
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, Teen Fiction Re: Finding Light {I}

    Hello, my friend. First, this is my first review in about six months, so forgive me if I say something dumb or completely out of line that you don't agree ...

    Sun May 04, 2014 8:29 pm
  • Short Story » Romantic, Dramatic Re: The Curious Romances of Edmund Sullivan

    Hello, my friend. First, let me just say that you are one of those brilliant writers. One of those brilliant writers who has mapped out the formula for writing beautiful ...

    Wed Jan 08, 2014 6:01 am
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: Glass Maiden - [chapter one]

    Hello, my friend. First, let me apologize for how long it took me to get this review up. With the holiday ending, I simply found all of my free time ...

    Wed Jan 08, 2014 5:27 am
  • Other » Horror, Dramatic Re: Meet me by the starry seacove, and I'll show you how to die

    Hello, my friend. First, might I say that you possess an incredible way with words. Incredible, my friend. The vivid imagery and descriptions within this work were simply splendid. I ...

    Tue Jan 07, 2014 4:32 am
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, Other Re: Imperium

    Hello, my friend. First, I applaud you for writing in the present tense. I have always found it extremely difficult to do so. Therefore, I think congratulations are in order. ...

    Mon Jan 06, 2014 4:46 am
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Amber's World: Prologue

    Hello, my friend. First, I would like to say that your writing drew me into this story. This wasn't overly descriptive to the point of annoyance. You were clear, simple, ...

    Sun Jan 05, 2014 6:37 am
  • Short Story » Romantic, Teen Fiction Re: Uncertainty

    Hello, my friend. First, I found your writing to be rather charming. You have a realistic voice steeped in the sort of day to day realism that I am never ...

    Sun Jan 05, 2014 6:06 am
  • Short Story » Science Fiction, Fanfiction Re: Scribbling Galaxies

    Hello, my friend. First, Doctor Who is one of the greatest television programs of all time. I am a vicious, rabid, near religious worshiper of Doctor Who and all Doctor ...

    Sun Jan 05, 2014 5:42 am
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: Paralleled - [chapter one]

    Hello, my friend. First, might I say that your writing is magnificent. You have a defined, comfortable voice from which you write, giving power to your words and your story. ...

    Sun Jan 05, 2014 5:16 am
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, Teen Fiction Re: The Experimentalist - Chapters 1-5

    Hello, my friend. First, welcome to YWS! And, I just have a quick suggestion: divide this into individual chapters and re-post it. You are a fantastic writer. If you want ...

    Sat Jan 04, 2014 7:24 am
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Oh, give me love

    Hello, my friend. First, I rather enjoyed this poem. It had beautiful language, but it didn't take away from the raw nature of the poem. It was truthful, wherein the ...

    Sat Jan 04, 2014 5:14 am
  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, Fantasy Re: Howl - Chapter 6

    Hello, my friend. First, I am finally glad to get back to reading your novel! I honestly love it. It is a different, creative way of approaching a usually overused ...

    Sat Jan 04, 2014 12:01 am


Every time I’ve gotten feedback that was hard to take it was usually hard to take because there was truth in it and I didn’t like that (or didn’t want to receive it). That’s not to say all harsh feedback is good or that we should be harsh for harshness’ sake, but learning to absorb truth without letting it break your inner core/break you is a lifelong skill that keeps your mind elastic and open to learning.
— soundofmind