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In that case it was really well done. Congrats, laddie.

This needs some serious revising. The ending especially. It does however still have a lot of potential, as for the most part it was enjoyable and good. I'll leave it ...

Oh haha, how FREAKIN' hilarious...no, seriously you should give up your day job and become a comedian...i'm sure you'd be much better at it!!

the story is a history of what had hapeened to him, i tried to (and it seems like i failed) to create the sense that Merlin's spirit actually had travelled ...

Whoa. Okay-do you realise your rant was longer than the actual story? Not that, that matters- i personally love to rant :lol:. I've gone over the story and fixed the ...

Ok first off, yes I did really write this story, I was bored and so I just wrote whatever came to mind. Secondly, short stories dont usually have plots, they're ...

Does anyone have any thoughts on this story? Any suggestions on ways to improve my writing style? Anything?

hey ppls, i posted this story on this site coz i wanted to know what you guys thought of it! Am i to take then that no one has any ...

i generally agree with ur good reviews, but it must be said that without Bartimaeus and his hilarios footnotes :lol: the series would be as nothing.