Jiggity

Im in complete and total agreement Aviator man. Twas a wee-bit wordy at times, but on the whole it was alrite and extremely well-written.

The story has been renamed: 'Shadow.' Go there for the story with its NEW installment.

My initial thoughts were that it would be a vampire, but then I thought maybe a werewolf would be better. However I extremely dislike Werewolves...or the traditional idea of one ...

Well this was really delayed but I finally got round to getting and starting to read it. Now I dont need to complete to submit a review because I can ...

Thanks a lot guys, In am, to say the least, very surprised at the response this piece generated. Thanks most of all to you Ginny, I took your suggestions and ...

Lol. yeah that's probably true. As usual Snoink comes to the rescue...and then provides the once hapless person with a stinging critique. Dont ask where that came from, Im as ...

Im starting it now. I should finish and post within the next 2hrs, if i dont im not going to hurry it and will post in the morning tomorrow.

Lol. Thanks a lot. Im not really sure what he's going to do with his extra powerful senses, there just there so as to inform the reader that he's not ...

I spotted some spelling mistakes and if not corrected I will return to point them out. Otherwise nicely done. ~Jiggy

Thanks alot man, I appreciate the comment. A lil encouragement makes a world of difference.

I definetly enjoyed it. Am I wrong or is Akai one pf the feikan? If so, that just seeed a little obvious, thought I should mention it.

Well it was good enough I suppose. I dont think your looking to improve something that's already been handed in...are you? Anyway it might need some minor adjustments, nothing serious. ...

I loved it. Very amusing. suggestion though; use 'speech marks'

It could ptentially be depends on how well written it is and on the clarity i.e. how clear it is that certain parts are flashbacks. I cant really tell until ...

Quote: There was a soundless explosion of light-blinding him-he couldn’t see anything! He cried out, but what emerged was not the frightened cry of a boy; instead the soft cry ...