Jiggity

Cheers, Im glad you liked it, especially since youve seen the movie and can compare/ relate to the piece. I'll continue with it and see it where it goes.

To me Take this out of the two stanza;s it appears in. It does nothing but halt the flow of the poem. Overall, this is really good, I quite enjoyed ...

I think I should actually read LATENT HERITAGE. There is somewhat of a hype about it and I've seen for myself that your an excellent it should be worth the ...

Yes you should check into it, and so should everyone else, its an awesome movie. Seriously, its ridiculously good and coming from the M.Night.Shyamalan Im not surprised, as he is ...

Nothing puts me off more then unbroken text. Seriously, I look at it then just turn away, regardless of the quality of writing. Use paragraphs and spacing please, and I'll ...

Yeah I kinda noticed that, lol. I'll change it. As to the story, that sounds fine, of course it may turn out different but we'll just have to wait and ...

Awesome, thanks for your comments. I'll get to fixing those errors. As for the BMW/Bus thing, yes there are reasons for its existence, the primary one being that he is ...

Lol. This was just hilarious. DQ was very nicely captured, I think, as a character. Bravo, Griffy, Bravo indeed.

Okay, that was a bit harsh, only because I forgot to ention the good qualities of the story. You have great description, a if not unique, then is definetly a ...

Consider the fact that the "child" isnt actually a child but something else entirely. Tha would apply in the case of a normal little boy/girl but not in this instance. ...

I dont even know anymore. I'll see what happens, it could change. I agree with bubblewrapped about the menacing aspect of the original...but Im not concrete on this...*sigh*, it could ...

Thanks again for looking at this and taking the time to critique it. Its much appreciated and always will be. The fourth chapter will soon follow.

*whistles*, that was some critique. I dont blame Misty for dying speechlessly. Nicely done Griffy. That affectively ends anything constructive one could say...its all been said. Misty now you can ...

Chapter 3 The soldiers stumbled about, having rapidly lost both the trail and their sense of direction while regaining a very sensible fear. They had lost the trail to the ...

Hahahahaaha. Lmao. I was laughing throughout that critique. Seriously, you make me laugh and funnily enough, I find myself liking you too. Strange, but hey thats life. Anyway, I want ...