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Hurrumph ... took ya long enough! lol, jk. Thanks for the critique WG, um and just so you know, there is no time period. This isnt historical in any way, ...

Well so far its pretty good. I was pleasantly surprised. There's not much I can say on what there is here except that its excellently written considering your age, with ...

I havent yet, but I definetly will. I thought it would be interesting to write in a style thats out of my comfort zone, something I'd never tried before. I ...

Coolies, danke snoinkus. I dont know about cliched high fantasy... although this is certainly a style I'm not used to and have never written in. Maybe I should just rewrite ...

Post the entire thing. Its impossible to jusdge a story accurately based on an excerpt. It does, however, seem to be well written. Post the rest and we shall see.

Its not emo? What are you blind? Sorry to say, but it is: EMO EMO EMO EMO EMO EMO plus infinity

Dido.

Lmao, my god but this screams: EMO!!! hahahahahaha, I really liked it though, and bar the very obvious grammar, or lack therof, its quite good. Made me laugh.

AWESOME. Just AWESOME.

I havent read it, I know its a terrible sin, and I am in complete love with LOTR but I havent. The only time I tried, I was much younger ...

Awesome. Totally and utterly awesome.

Got the second highest actually. 14/15. Thanks for taking the time to comment Miss Imp, tis much appreciated. Suggestion noted.

Awww, I really dont have time to complete my task, or indeed any other, which is kinda sad. But this was really really good. Not helpful I know, but still ...

On this pretty myspace girl's she has a wall picture of On this pretty girl's myspace she has a wall picture of ... That is all.

Ecellent, responses! there is no person in this poem Really? No way! Of course there isn't, its about an umbrella. And it is deliberately ambiguous, how boring and dull would ...