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Of course posting it wasn't a bad idea! The whole reason we post work is so we can get better. I've posted work here too as a newbie; everybody has, ...

And Dorian is head of the household, Adrian is his child and so is Alessa (who is also his wife), which means that Adrian cannot argue with his maker. It's ...

And the 'big girl' is, I confess, me. Ah! I knew it. :wink: I'm not sure what you mean here. :/ Could you explain it a bit better, please? And ...

Did you say upcoming movie? Why oh why do I never hear about these things? xD

Hey again. :) I don't think you have to show more background on Anna's mum, but to know it would improve your writing. As Lauren said, work out the detail ...

Hello again. I figure I'd better try and answer your question to the best of my ability. I want to help you out with the thick prose as best I ...

I think that the author herself kinda forgot about the supposed baby as much as Peeta and Katniss did. I had to read that part in the book so many ...

Apologies, I was too lazy to point them out. Okay, let me show you one, because I don't like leaving things unfinished. "None of your business, Fiyre." She muttered In ...

Hey, I know where you're coming from. It's not impossible to make werewolves - sorry, lycans, hehe - original, but it gives you a bit of a hard task. Meyer ...

*feels dumb* Okay, I knew I should have googled that one.

Thanks for putting them in! Ah, so it was just your computer. I guess I was harsh then, so I apologise again. I would do nitpicks, but going through this ...

Thank you very much, to all the reviewers, and for the gold stars! I've PMed most of you, though, so I'll just use this reply to say thanks again and ...

Hey, thanks for both the reviews. deafwriter: Thanks for the feedback, but I'm not sure I can act on it without rewriting and making this completely unrecognisable. I know this ...

I know I've PMed both of you to thank you already, but I thought I may as well say so here too. I haven't read any of Ray Bradbury, but ...

The second one's out here, in England? Why do I never keep track of these things? *rushes off to Google*